DAWN, a Ghazal 


Poetry challenge no.44 is a Ghazal from Jane Dougherty, please click on the link below to join in her deviously difficult challenge:

Picture and theme supplied by dear Jane while the words are supplied by me- Dublin bound passenger awaiting his plane in Paris. I’m getting in early as there’s a grand Irish wedding waiting!

A ghazal is a love poem, although like so many love stories, it grows dark.

And so light leaned in as we had done

Though not for fever, though not for fun,


Although we had found and we had felt

That rarest gift which cannot be shun;


On one fair night a love alighted

When two from far took their breath as one,


Yet time, being so when love slips in,

Seeks all connections to come undone,


When the dawn arrived, shrouded in shame,

Born to tear apart what had begun,


She pleaded with the light unfolding

But hearts lost hold for the day had won.

All words by Damien B. Donnelly


6 thoughts on “DAWN, a Ghazal 

  1. Jane Dougherty

    Nice poem, Damien, but it’s not a ghazal. Somebody didn’t read the assembly instructions, did he? Two line stanzas, the second line ends in the refrain and the rhyme falls on the word that immediately precedes the refrain so it’s an internal rhyme. I hope you have a wait for the bus at the airport to sort this one out 🙂

    1. deuxiemepeau

      They are meant to be two line stanzas but iPhone doesn’t like to be edited! I’m computer less and WordPress editing not so friendly!
      For the rest, I have to indeed read the instructions again! Plumbing was easier!!! 😳😜😘

      1. deuxiemepeau

        Worked on it on the plane! I had actually even read shadow poetry for instructions and missed completely the hidden rhyme! Naughty!
        I’ll be back xx

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